A twist in the story, and at the end of it, too. I never expected that, ever!
The story feels alive. It's like I'm in there, in the bar, sitting next to her, next to them...heh, I can almost smell the smoke.
Anyway great work!

I didn't see that one coming. A clever twist and nice prose though morbid (as usual). I like it.

This is some serious good work. I have not read much of your stuff, but I felt like I was in that club, I felt the attraction to that man, I felt their pleasure and her ultimate pain.
I am seriously amazed bc I just wasn't expecting this to be good (things rarely are when just anyone can post stories on the internet).
You humbled me with this.
You are a breath taking writer.
-Melissa

You are a brilliant writer. I bow before your ability to manipulate words to your own design. It's like watching a chef at work. You added the right amounts of everything and came out with this masterpiece of emotion and passion and yet at the same time cold emotional detachment. Then ending just sent a shiver up my spine...I'm still in shock after reading it and I wouldn't mind if there were more stories like this one in the world.
If you have time, check out Enat's stuff! She is a good writer here too! She has a story coming out soon i think.
Once more, Cetait magnifique.
~moi~

the story comes alive the way you use the words... it stirs something in us...
you have a way with words. don't stop writing.
-love, enat.

I love your writing. Really reaches inside us when you describe the club and how she feels. A few typos here and there, but wonderfully written. Hypnotic...
I't's great to see you posting up again.
Izzy J.

I bow at your feet. It is a gift for anyone to describe things and events as masterfully as you have. I have one question.
"and inevitably, the cold steel blade within her." Why "inevitable"?
It's interesting but I saw a movie on Lifetime that began exactly like that...

Hey! Oh my god..this is so freaky...horrifying actually, lol, but extremely good...I loved the descriptions, the way the story evolved...and you have such a way to.. well you completely changed the whole story in the last five lines which is terrific! Awesome! Please write more soon! Love, Mia

Wow... I could just picture every moment of it. Very desriptive. HUZZAH *adds to favorite stories*