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| claireponcherrii 2008-04-06 ch 1,   | oh! |
| Eve Of Fire 2004-08-27 ch 3, | Cecil's breath caught, he broke out in a cold sweat, 'oh god, I'm so nervous!' He forced himself to breathe normally and turned to face the girl. A face he had some to know and love over the last few years confronted him, he forced himself to smile as his face flushed uncontrollably. (You meant 'a face he had COME to know') *I need you and to be here on Saturday with the other guys at 9am sharp.* (You and...) *Just do it. It's important. Oh, and bring gems you got with you.* (Bring THE gams. Otherwise it sounds like a person.) Well those are the mistakes i caught. Hope that helps and is what you asked for. Pretty good story, but where on earth are there Paladin's roaming around? |
| andyrew 2004-08-26 ch 18, | w00t! im in the story! roflmao! hey gary, impressive story! really cool and keep it up cuz i want to find out wat happens next! andrew. yeah rite. andrew |
| Eve Of Fire 2004-08-24 ch 2, | Nah, not wrong. Good work actually. I LOVE claymores. the fight was awesome |
| Eve Of Fire 2004-07-22 ch 1, | Thanks for reading and reviewing for my story. I've corrected the spelling errors, though next time it would bw much apreciated if you told me which chapters had errors. As for your story, it looks to have a good start,good work. |
| ade625 2004-06-26 ch 14, | Great story, it's keeping me on the edge of my seat. Can't wait for the next chapter and find out who that andrew guy is. |
| henmanbro 2004-03-13 ch 1, | hey hey great story keep it up! shouldn't have commented about chapter 4 but i reckon its betta now :) hehe anyways hurry up with chapter 5 i can' t wait! :P |
| Aureya of Chocolate 2004-02-25 ch 4, | 0_o, no reviews and FOUR CHAPTERS! that's what i call dedication... wish i could be as commited to a story... lol. yeah, well, overall it's not bad, and i don't have a lot of tolerance with crappy stories, being the evil ** i am :P, but im really liking your story! im not getting bored, instead im getting into the story, and that doesnt happen a lot! lol. so good work there! it needs a bit of editing, you know, like grammatical errors and some places you didnt structure a sentence properly, or something, but nothing major, cos it's a really great story. keep up the good work! btw, im a friend of henmanbros. as you would put it, he's a paranoid little bugger and he doesnt want me putting his real name up on the net... lol. my name's jasmeen, hi! and yes, that is my real name... and im in yr 11 as well... and i go to stgghs... and yeh =) once again, good story, dude! lotsa luv, jazzo *cough* mary sue *cough* ...ignore that (A) |