this rocks! like... a lot! I love the use of "ye olden language"... :) I like.

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I bow in your presence of talented poetry.
*Bows deeply.*
*_Layne, Daughter of Flames_*

Actually, I'm presbyterian. Go figure, eh?

Interesting...I noticed that your bios mentioned your interest in Zen Catholicism. It really shows in the poem. Highly descriptive. It makes me thinks of Gregorian monks chanting to classic rock (don't ask me why.)

This is good... very well written...

Very nicely writen. I didn't notice anything at all wrong with it, Great job.