I don't know if you intended the humour or that's just me but i think it works well either way. A rather sarcastic view which is something I absolutely love.

Very original and unique, how do you come up with all those ideas, the different perspecitves you use for your poems, that's really inventive. This one is very uncanny again, and very powerful in its message, sad and depressing but powerful. I nearly cried at the lines "Your deep red scars have paved the path,Across your ruined skin.", they have affected me deeply. If you find yourself in this, be enfolded in a tearful hug. ;-;

I really like the way the rhyme is not ofrced, and just flows. I like the way it is so much like a song, can almost fit a tune to it. Well done. Cendrillon

Like the rhymes... It reminds me of a stupid poem that I read in Literature... Only your poem is not stupid. I like the darkness of it and the last stanza is deifinitely my favorite. Great job.
much love
vintage fade

I didn't read this poem. I'll tell you the truth. So why am i reviewing? Because I sang these lyrics instead. Started with the tune of "Welcome to the Jungle" and made it up from there keeping in the same key and your lyrics made it absolutely beautiful.

I really like it. I still say it reminds me of the song "Hotel California" by the Eagles. Really well done.

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that was...scary. but also very, very good. :)

That is indescribably brilliant. The techniques you used are great, and the imagery is almost scary (but in a good way!). I agree that this is probably your best piece yet. :-)

This is so creative and well written. I'm so in love with this. The rhyming is excellent and it portrays such an awesome picture. By far one of the best things I've ever read