I really like this:D the rytherm and the way you write it. IT creates images in my mind:D so good job:D

This is great. I love the rhyming pattern and the feeling of the poem. :)
Turquoise

Wow! I think that's one of the best poems I've ever read on Fictionpress!

Beautiful. You have a lovely talent.
-Jessica

wow, this is so great! i love the comparison you made, this is awesome.

I liked this a lot, the idea was very original. Beautifully written. I especially lied the last two lines. Keep up the good work!
Lsay312