I think 'I always thought I would remember you for those eyes, but in the end all I will envision is the rhinestone daffodil' is really powerful. I think it really says something beyond just subjective emotion. Reminds me of Norwegian Wood by Haruki Murakami. Like you're swept off your feet by a moment, but then when you look back you're blind to what was beautiful, and you remember something else completely. Hard to put into stuff, sorry I centred in on only one bit!

oh, this is simply beautiful.
i can't say anything,
but it's going on
my favourites for sure.
-kismet.

I think that what I like about the poem is the restraint, the carefulness. This is surprisingly distinct because of that. Closing lines *very* strong. The word 'exquisite' jars with me, but I can't figure out why that should be so.

Absolutely bloody beautiful. Little glimpses of flower, neck, air, sunlight, green, hospital...
and the emotion woven through it, of losing someone. Well-crafted.

I love the first stanza, esp the two last lines. Very beautiful. The title too was very catchy...Rhinestone Daffaodil.
Very nice...Thanks also for my reviews. I look foward to reading more of your work.

once again... fantastic. beautiful imagery, nice flow... what can i say? you were not kidding when you said your area of expertise was poetry. *wink*
i still don't like those asterisks... they seem to break up the flow. but maybe i'm just weird.

Awesome yet again. You can manipulate language in a way few other people ever could. Congratulations.

Claire,
I have to say that when I read the title I immediately thought Michael Jackson. Then I thought about flowers. And finally I came to the conclusion that it was the title of a poem. A poem that, I personally thought, started out a bit choppy but had some uniquely stellar moments in the area of imagery. I liked "youthful sacrifice" and the detailed paleness and the way you described the hair. Good, good, good. Like candy, but not.

I'm very impressed. I've never read anything like this before. It all sounds so professional, like I'm reading from a novel. Awesome.

exquisite indeed.
"a daffodil spring", "Even the air was green", "a youthful sacrifice", etc etc etc the wonderfulness just goes on! your work is staggering. yes, that good. i love it.
mezzie

powerful..."you look like a primrose, / wilting in the sunlight that puddles on your sheets"...""in this silence the yellow rhinestones / are more alive than you"...wow. keep writing. :)
-escape into reality

Exceptionally well done; beautifully described and absolutely engrossing.
KEEP UP THE EXCELLENT WORK!
F.C

whoah. Deep. It's not quite as mystical as some of your other poems-or maybe it is. It seems to have an overarching "normal" story and maybe something deeper. Anyway-I liked it alot-reminds me of people in my life. The whole rhinestone imagery thing is so unique-I haven't seen many poems using rhinestones as imagery, but it works so well in this poem.

pretty. excellent imagery. bloody depressing!