All of the fierce emotions of love can seem to tear us apart. You captured that very well. You should consider writing songs. There are some brilliant potential song lyrics here...
Favorite part:
"Raindrops like
Tears, their static fills my
Head, space
Between my ears. Flood to
Wipe your
Memory away. Don't go, please,
Don't stay."
This part was so powerful/awesome. I love it!