Reviews for Ashes Falling - FictionPress.com

Damian-Kayne 2004-02-27 ch 1,	cool story, ignore the other reviwer about the Its it's thing, when u use language use it how u want. i love the description for [3]. ~Kayne~
Bakadesu 2004-02-23 ch 1,	Fluff-y. - I like your ideas; they're very sweet. Also, what with raining ash and all, your settings are among the more creative. thumbs-up - I think you take the character development a little too quickly, though. They fall in love very 'magically' - time had not been taken before to explore the dynamics of their relationship as friends, as it changes when Chris gets a girlfriend, and now as a couple. Without it, your story risks falling into cliche. - Also, please watch your "its" vs. "it's." "It's" is a contraction of "it is," and "its" is the possessive form of "it." - In conclusion, I did enjoy reading your story, but I can see where you can improve, especially in terms of character development. Well, keep writing!
tony the great 2004-02-22 ch 1,	great!