I simply cannot believe I didn't review this earlier. Stupid, stupid, stupid...*is beating self with geometry binder* simply amazing. Just shows how much people can be fooled by what they see...how a completely different life can be lived on the inside. No one has to know what goes on; no one really has to know who you are...wonderful. Is going on fave stories list.

i love the pull in your words with the way you've structured your freeverse, it's so enticing, and has this feeling of movement from thought to paper without the inbetween stage that would screw everything up. i can only write in this way in particular moods, at rare times. awesome.
mezzie

Ohh, me likes very much. You know how I love these angsty poems. ;) Anyways, I'll try and be back in English soon. See yas!

Ditto about the "long-lashed brown." 'Tis quite a pretty image. I think I semi-got it... Should reread it sometime to think more but don't have time now. Did that make any sense? Anyway, pretty poem.

"long-lashed brown" is a really nice image. kills two pillows with one stone it does. About sharing something, then a certain..let's call it ingredient changes?
Baffling in a way where the words simply loose their meaning because of the prettyness.

Well. that was interesting. Very unusual style which i believe was the aim- hmm. Not sure whether i liked it or not, although that's besides the point. I think that recognition is sometimes bad was one of the points in th poem- but then again sometimes i'm not so sure. Well. Thought provoking poem to say the least

First. Thankyou very much for your reviews. It is always complimentative to be noticed in this gargaling world were the sheer mass of input means even the best can be over looked. To the point about punctuation. I belive it means you can have more control over the pace and angle of the poetry and aslo can be used intelligently. You are right though, sometimes lack of it is very releasing for the works on the page and in the readers mind but it is up to the discression of the poet to how they approach it. Wouldnt it be nice if there was a discussion room in which we could argue over points and views on this website. I have had a small peek at your work and I do think it is good. I look forward to reading more of your work over the next few days and I might review some. I enjoy short poems more and is aslo the style I mainly write in.
Thanx again.
nine iron