very nice...lovely...keep on writing.

you have really let yourself down here. i know that this is not your full potential. you can do better. where is all the sex?

Hmn.. I see the point you are trying to make here, but otherwise, the poem isn't very good. The flow is very jerky, and I believe it could be better. Read it out loud to yourself and see.

It's okay... but I'm not into mush crap. Not my falt! It's... er... my brothers! You don't expect me to blame it on myself do you? :) Oh well. It was good, for what it was.
~Ankh

OMG! this is so beautiful!It really expresses how love is!you can definitly relate to it! Great job!!