A wee bit confusing...a lot of plot-twisting a little too soon...and too many character introductions, therefore YOU NEED THE NEXT CHAPTER! I'm itching to make sense of this all.
Anywho, great work!
Can't wait for more! ::looks at her paper:: Must I do the hidious thing...ugh.
~ Little Dog Muse

o, and the plot thickens! ::gets attacked by pop-ups:: AH! DIE DIE DIE! ::whacks them away with her bokken and frying pan:: His.
::praces off to read more::
Good work, btw.
~ Little Dog Muse

Well, I am very successfully -avoiding- my research paper...::looks distainly at her pile of books:: Eww...but now I found a good reason why!
I MUST READ THIS STORY!
It compells me to stay and read it, this is so an attention-grabber! And for that, I applaude for getting someone to stop and read a story is -hard-!
But anywayz, o, japanese-y Anime-y-ish! WE! I love these stories!
With mystery and physic powers! EVER BETTER!
Only, I wish the chapter was a wee bit longer. ;_;
Great work so far! It is very well edited for errors and the content is too cool!
::prances off to read more::
~ Little Dog Muse

im confused? its really good but it goes in lots of places at one time and i think you need to explain more

is a there such thing as a Borkis apple? looking forward to next capter!! update soon please!!

that was great! i cant wait for more! update soon plz! and you didnt put tyran or whatever her name was in there! gr!

o... that was really good, kinda makes me tingling, i was a little confused at first but if i read more than i will be ok. Lucian sounds like a kool character... and i am especially fond of your word usage... woot... thats my favorite word but to me its wo0t! hehe keep writing! ^_^x