You do closure without making it tacky, rare talent. Most people try to wrap things up and just end up making it too much like a fairy tale by tying up every single loose end. You left the loose ends but ended it well by repeating those last/first few lines. It made sense, but it wasn't tacky... anyway, great job. I might like to know more about the characters but the story might work better if they're somewhat anonymous. Anonymity is a form of character description in some ways. I think you did exactly what you wanted to with this story, and did it very well.

whee i GET IT!! omg i actually get it! lol when i started reading this i admit i went :| HUH?? but i stuck with it and it really drew me in. and i LOVE the connection at the end. it all makes sense now!! omg love how the entire story carried more on dialogue than anything else and how it was like the entire relationship without being vague OR too wordy in just one chapter. beautiful job, really it was. love it ... especially the way the ending/beginning only makes sense after you read the story and even then you have to think about it to realize it's made up of random lines from two people throughout the night. kudos this was so beautiful!! i wanna go check out everything else you've written now, heh. more detail would have been nice, but i suppose that spoils the entire short-story kinda thing you have going so scratch that. it really was sweet, though. love it ... and it wasn't happy WOOT!! =D keep it up
~k8

Oh wow. Just, wow. The way you wrote the story, with the resonations at the start and finish were perfect for the mood of the story. For some reason, I wanted it to be in the present tense, to disconnect me more, but it is beautiful. Nice work.