Great story.. it's just long enough to develop the characters and but short enough to not get boring. Also, the emotions are very realistic- you can sense the delusion and panic in the protagonist's mind.Good job. =3

awesome story.it's so sad though.

hey, it's way cool!

That was really sad and touching. You write really well, but I have to admit it was very ocnfusing in the beginning that there were two people and that they switched POVs everty paragraph, but that's also part of the story (the realization)

JOE: Did you change perspective? I cant really rate this story b/c u lost me.
KYR: Ignore him, its easy to lose him, good job on the story, by the way.

More people should review this so that you can be reassured that it's an AWESOME story. Really just an enjoyable tale. A little sad, but formed in such a way that the woman's passing is peaceful. Well done!