Fantastic!

This is very good and actually quite a disturbing little tale in the sense that I could picture the whole scene so clearly.
A sign of good writing!
Very Well Done.
KEEP WRITING!
F.C
I'd be interested in your opinion of my horror fiction "Torment or Torment2" if your interested that is. :¬D

Hello-
I thought this was really good for being really short, nice job!