Wow Shin, I wasn't expecting Mazs to start the war so quickly. *blinkeh* And so much killing? That's not very nice of him. =P At least the little girl was saved. *noddles*
Anyways, it's going great, though if I had to give you some piece of advice I'd have to say that you could work on your sentence structure a bit... But it's great anyways! ^.^
~Jedzi~sama~

Wow, quite the interesting story Shin. I'm liking it really. It's unique and it draws me in, though it's quite a bit to read at a time. I hope you can get a bit more written and get the next chapter up, I'd greatly like to see what's going to happen next.
I'll have to say that Kiv is neat, I like him and having pure white eyes is so cool! I also like the idea of only Mazs and Hale having wings, though I'd kill to get myself a pair of silver ones. Like that'd ever happen though. Anyways, get the next chappie up before I die of anticipation! XD
~Jedzi~sama~

This is really good, write more soon. It reminds me in a way of a book i read not so long ago 'fleabag and the ring fire', you should check it out, if you like this style of writing then its your kind of book. Sparrw xx