Pretty bleak... this story is based on one of my favourite songs and I think you did a very good job of changing it into story format. It ends very tragically but how else could such a true-to-life story end?
One small criticism though. Your dialouge is rather hard to read. When you are switching between people talking you should start a new paragraph each time a different person speaks.
Overall an excellent story that must be told.
Bravo.

this kinda brings a tear to your eye. sad, but it's good that it invokes emotion. great job.

Wow thats great! I've heard that song a million times before but i never thought of writing a story about it. It's a terrible story but it was well written.

Sorry about 'Inflict the pain' the red on red part, i remember it being semi like 'the blade' but not that close! I didn't mean to plagarise that! So sorry I swear I did not remember. But other than that I think the two pieces or very different

That's kinda scary and it's wel written. Did he actually kil them all or was he talking about something in his mind. Something I forgot to mention in my review of Bethy's Tears... you made me cry... again, well anyway, keep up the good writing. Could you maybe write something a little less depressing soon though I love your writing and it's great and all but so much of it (though it may be true) is rather depressing. Oh well!
love ya

Whoa! i've never heard the song, but that is one powerful songfic. Now i'll HAVE to check out the song. Nice job writing it! sorry this isn't longer, but i don have long, and i wanted to say something about this cuz i realli liked it. keep writing (n' check out my latest poem if u get a chance) :)
~KS