huh. this is weird... whatever. It was okay. not really my cup of tea.

Why would his mother/brother come along?
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I like the way he throws out all the little phrases... like he barely understands them, they were just drilled into him... we are all being brainwashed, somehow.
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He only needs one kill for the ritual, not that they'll only eat one, right?
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She took his kill, so does that make him.. not a man, now? Is she like, taking the credit?
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They're smart. Really. To know to kill only males, to be able to identify males (I guess), to have a word for Aunt and Uncle, rather than just Mother and Sibling, to have a sort of religon... these are not mere cats.
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So they're omnivores, not carnivores...cool.
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So her name is... Sun?
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Ashy dirty?
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pour, not poor.
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I almost expected to see the word "Whack!" at the end of that.. Nice! Is this part of the tapestry?
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~Syluna

Do they... time travel to study the apes?
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Feline destined to rule... They do! We care for them, all that. They often do act like we are slaves, do they not?
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Light that blacks out the sun.. feels like a contradiction in terms, to me.
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Human hair is unclean? Why? And why is humpback hair any cleaner? These are obviously Egyptians.. Ankh is both the egyptian cross and their word for a mirror, right?
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SKULK? That isn't a word, I don't believe...
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Who's to say that beasts are not more, rather than less, than Man? :-)
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Very nice! I like! That last line is one of the better hooks you've written.
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~Syluna

This looks interesting... Please continue!

Hm. Interesting. But a little confusing at times.

Ah. That's why I couldn't do a story using her. You can use Nessa, if it comes up.
This is coolish so far, but a bit confusing. Merf.
~~Mera