very intersting, but a little depressing. Good ending, considering the circumstances.

Sir Oal Imp, this piece was awesome. The details that were weaved, Oh so gracefully into this great writing gave a certain spice and flare that is extremely rare in a young man your age. Keep up the GREAT work.

Wow man, you've got real talent. Take it from me, your skills as a writer have gotten much better since your last story. This one really is full of the allusions you say are there. Again, you're right, I can't pinpoint a message either. Let's see, what to improve on...try and keep the story more connected, avoiding sentences that sorta jump out of place, ya know? Nice work, I love it.