I love the images and descriptions here. This flows well; the line breaks aren't awkward and the lengths are varied. I can't really think of anything to criticise here...normally I wouldn't like the all-caps, but I know in this case they're kind of central to the poem. ~pointythings

that was AWSOME love my lovely adjectives

very original, very well written. you have a very untethered kind of writing-keep it up