Sorry my writing skill is not good enough to give you constructive critism like you did for me, but what a fun story! Nice job! I'm adding you to my favorite authors list! ^_^

Hiya. I'm too lazy too log in. This story is cute. You wrote one about Emily, you should write one about me! Actually, I don't care. I just like complaining. So, anyways... the story is interesting. It's a bit of a jump from you being really nervous to you being so nonchalant, but not too bad. I like the dialogue too. Ok, I'm done now. Bye!!

Yay! I'm a character! I feel special. XD And my town IS the third safest town in the country! It IS, I tell you!
...Did you really remember what I was wearing that day? And was there really someone watching us from a window? I don't remember that...