I love me some o' those good ol' southernly tales.

Great job, the style was so reminscent of American Folklore. Plus, I like the fact it's an exaggerated tale about an exaggerated guy who is the relative of a famous, exaggerated, folk character.

Nice work.

I like, I like! Fan here, yep yep yep, that's for sure. I like your way of writing... your natural ability to be funny and the like. Hehe. Jesus is my homeboy and he rocks like relient K!

That’s really good. I like the style a lot. Should it say “crumbled of leaves”. It’s my favorite description along with the “grass that crumbled to dust if ya sneezed on it”. Oxen don’t pack lunches is hilarious, also “`cause that's were the spittin's done”. Hee. You did a great job.

I liked it alot. I dunno. The word Flamin just makes me all tingly inside.. >_>
I think you need to go back to the first half and add some more of the accent. That way it'll blen a little better with the... rest.
Yay! Constructive critiques!!

This is absolutely brilliant! I especially enjoy the way you used dialect in your writing. It's almost like someone is reading this story to you in your mind and the announcer has a heavy southern accent. Okay, so it's not that heavy. Anyway! Keep up the excellent work! I hope to read more stories about Jack Bunyun and Flamin' Pete in the future. Someone could make a lot of good books with these stories!

It was the good the first time I read it and the second time was even better. I hope ya got a good grade on this Ruth.