it spooks me. I hear a certain repetition in ideas every paragraph. Describing those who are sick, you almost make me feel sick, not that that's any kind of complaint. And how the sick one thinks...whoo!

Here's my pledge to you, Nicky: each time you take down the review I leave for your story, I will return the following day and post it again. Either gain control of Fictionpress and ban reviews, or be prepared to spend a lot of time taking down reviews that don't praise your collection of misspelled words. Here's my review: this was terrible. Learn to spell first, then learn how to write. Hope that helps!

Awesome story man, you catch the gothic style I've always strived for.
I've just one problem, you need commas and semi colons, it slows down the story and makes one focus more. It's not a huge deal, but it helps me read at least.
Well done.

this is great-it's got great description and flow. you have a nice dark voice that's really good. hey i went to authorsden and read a few of your poems. i read i think it was called Killing the Rapture and i liked that one. you went " . . . " after every line and that's a very creative element that certainly adds to the flow of your poem. yeah today's the first day of spring break and i'm bored. anyway thanks for the reviews. i think ill send JM "The Highway Shift." Either that or "I hate Basements." Which one do you think i should send?
r/r me ~~sg

Hello.
I find it ironic that the very story you suggested I read I had just read the day before. Strange how things work. I liked this one better than Insect. I think it's because this is just something taht I find a bit more interesting. That's just me though. THis is, as i said in the other one, very good. A few little grammatical things, nothing that is a life or death tresspass, but no real worries. After reading only the two, I have decided that you are an extremely gifted writer. Not that me deciding that means much, but I thought you'd like to know. Well, I'll be watching for more stuff up by you and will try to read all you already have. Later!
Gata de la Noche

very descriptive. Nice work ^-^

Hmm-
Very nice piece you have here, Nick. Very dark, and thats how I like a story. You have got the dark talent down, how about you send some darkness to my brain, tell me, how do you create your darkness within your story?
Very nice essay.
Whispers In Silence

Hey. How come you didn't post something about this one? I could get into this one way more than I could with The Ghost at the Wheel.
Hall of mirrors. I was in one, one time. The scenery anyways's right of Hooper's "Funhouse".