Mmh?! Who's that guy!? Rgh *pulls on hair* now I'm all curious! Cliffies are evil things. Overall I'd say this one had some beautiful description in it. The sentinces flowed together very nicely.
~Khlern

You know I like it. And I want more too >> *gnaws on you and your tendency not to finish stories* if you ever need help with one of my charas feel free to ask!

Not bad, a little confusing at times but not bad. Continue