Okay, this got really good when the weird little conversations started. That was neat. 'I want to go with you!' was very effective. As cliche as this sounds, you really do have a way with words.

I thought it was very interesting and the format was tight. Great great poem! this blew me away. Each lines had different stories to tell. Keep writing!
If u can, please r and r some of my work, it will mean a lot to me
Thanks!