Yeah, you should look some stuff up on the forms of Haikus. There all great, just in the wrong place.

~~Franken~~

Cool, another one!! It's QT
Cya =)
*WG

You definitly have great potential in writing haikus... very good... i like this one the best...

this isnt a haiku their only 3 lines 5 syllables, 7 syllables, then 5 again. there is one other type of haiku but that is also 3 lines. Another thing is dont ask for reviews, I wouldn't have read it if it was anything other than a haiku just because you asked to R&R.