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| Eypherath 2008-07-07 ch 1, | abuseWhen I finished that story, I just had to cry. So...beautiful...So very beautiful... |
| Franziska 2008-03-26 ch 1, | abuseIch möchte mich den 43 Vorrednern ansprechen. Die Geschichte ich sehr schön. Du solltest mehr davon schreiben. |
| Moon's Poetess 2008-02-15 ch 1, | abuseIt's beautiful. That's all I have to say =) Moon's Poetess |
| average-psycho 2007-10-22 ch 1, | abusethis is really beautiful. I love the idea of a "love that would not flinch". A beautiful story that radiates strong compassion. I think everyone would like a love like that. |
| KimHua 2007-01-31 ch 1, | abuseHi, I was recommended to read some of your material by Stratiotes... My favourite line in this piece is "...its silver horn no menace to her, but a silent pledge of protection, a deadly threat to her foes." It really portrayed a sense of the unicorn being loving and in that love also powerful, dangerous to those who would threaten the girl. It was especially poignant considering her obvious emotional pain. |
| Aiveen 2006-04-07 ch 1, | abuseA wonderful story, very profound... just wonderful, I think. |
| bahaghari 2006-03-20 ch 1, | abuseBeautiful. So beautiful. Sorry, it's all I can say. |
| Haberdasher 2006-01-18 ch 1, | abusethis was very sweet! a very hopeful story, and so sad. im glad the unicorn comes to her in the end. and the dedication to your friend; so lovely. (as for northern lights, dont take the title literally. ;) its whoever you want it to be.) - the Lady Elaine |
| Pheobe Meryll 2005-11-19 ch 1, | abuseThis is beautiful. It has a beautiful message of redemption and I love how you conveyed the feelings of the masked but scarred girl. The old legend of the unicorn is such an intruiging one, but I;ve never seen a take like this on it before. It especially touches me because although I'm not much like the girl, I idenitied with her at the line, "No white Unicorn for her." The only part I disliked in this story was the allusion to "the merciless accuracy of an X-ray"...it disturbed the poetic flow somewhat. However, it's lovely, lovely piece and going on my favorites right away. |
| Maxine Durchova 2005-08-28 ch 1, anon. | abuseI have had dreams like this. A unicorn, coming to me, after years of terrible, longing waiting, and telling me, once and for all, that I am pure, that the sins that took my innocence were not mine, and I was finally worthy of someone's love and devotion. One day, I will write a story of hope like this... your story will help me arrive to the place where I need to be to write it. Thank you. Visit my site sometime. w.fictionpress.com/~maxinedurchova |
| marshbar960 2005-05-27 ch 1, | abusevery fanciful, whimsical, and inspirational. i know you have written this for your best friend, as you sincerely empathize with her. yet, i can't help but think that the flawless unicorn symbolize Jesus Christ. just my notion, but i could be wrong. thanks for sharing and keep writing! p.s. God loves you and so do I! |
| Citanya 2005-05-16 ch 1, | abuseBeautiful imagery, as expected. This whole story could be interpreted as a hopeful twist in many different situations, I'm sure. I assume you have seen the German (and English - co-production I think?) film The Last Unicorn (Das letzte Einhorn)? If not, you must watch it - it's still my very favourite film of all times and sounds as if it inspired part of this story. Good work! |
| azn aquarian 2005-04-23 ch 1, | abuseheyy!u reviewd a poem of mine..confessions..thX! ur story'z rilli well written but i think i'm a bit confused but nonetheless i love ur descriptions..they're so..beautiful.. |
| Madrynea 2005-04-08 ch 1, | abuseI love unicorns! You use such beautiful imagery and your descriptions seem to flow so easily. You really have talent. :) Keep writing! |
| Lottyness 2005-03-01 ch 1, | abuseWow, I read this and I could'nt look away. The use of words is amazing, and the description is really deep. Its amazing - Congratulations ! |