It was...rough. I can't say whether I liked it or not, just because this level of roughness had me contemplating if I even wanted to read it through. And somehow, the story gave me no surprises. (Exept the fact that it was Andrea and Josh who got to know, but their reactions weren't anything startling.) You wrote it well, all their thoughts and how Matt was like a drug to Jen, how they both were trying to fight it, but just couldn't.. But it still left my stomach churning. Not because I wanted an easy story, or expected it to be one, or because I'm not used to this kind of stuff (believe me, I am), but simply because..it was kind of boring in a nauseating way. The fact that I just could TELL what would happen (And because I feel kind of anxious. I should be reading for my matriculation exams right now. Or looking for a job. xD) was extremely frustrating. I still read it through because you CAN write. If you sucked, I wouldn't have. The story was a simple slice of (not so simple or usual) life, and I could see that you have an understanding of how people act when put into hard situations. Maybe that is the reason why I wasn't surprised. I'm a girl like Jen too, and I can easily empathize with her. (Not that I'm ** my brother, mind you. That would be even wierder, considering the fact that he's eight. ...Yugh, Thinking about that made me suddenly very sick.) We both have that "when the ** hits the fan, ignore it, or even better, run as fast as you can"-thing going on. The fact that they had'nt lived together their whole life made their attraction to each other more believable. I also liked the fact that you didn't just go with the easy path and said that "oh, all's dandy and well, Matt was just adopted". I was actually wondering whether you would but cast the thought aside because the story really didn't seem so...cliché. I also like your guts. And that you didn't make Andrea unbelievably bitchy. So, a grade you ask? ..I'd have to say 7. Above average, because you can write and I actually read the story. One more because I had the patience to review. ...Not that this was an especially useful reviw. -_-'

Luv, Caramel

PS. If it was unclear, what I wanted to convey is that you write well. Write me a fantasy/romance and I'll love it to no ends. x'DD

Wow, really nice end! I hope the best for them!! :-)
Of course, people would say: eh siblings, but the parents were divorced, so it's a complete other kind of basis.. I like your story!
DA-chen

haha.. vaseline and a playboy magazine :D typical man!
DA-chen

Wow... you only realise that she has forbidden sex with him in the end..

i rate it on a scale of 1 to 10... 11, it was amazing!! when jens breath got fast so did mine, when something bad happened i felt like i was there it was amazing! you have a TRUE gift i absoutley loved it, i email it to myself and read it on the way to school and way home from school. OMG! i LOVED IT! :) :) sequel!

jen is so stupid...

OH gosh! Nice ending! I agree with you on the adoption part, but then it just makes my heart a little lighter. Gosh this was intense. Although, I've had problems with how you write things. I've always been looking for forbidden love stories and I was so happy when I found yours. This story will surely be remembered.

only read a few chapters last night before i went to bed lol took me ages to find the story again a must add to the faveourites lisst :) this is great (so far) x

It stopped too abruptly...I was looking for the next page! It's caught my attention. I hope you write more.

wow.. i love the ending..
didnt expect that..
loved it..

ohmygod... wow. its kind of a weird subject, but its awesome. I cried. seriously, you should actually write, like, for more than just the internet, you have a great tyle to your work :)

Wow, this is a great story. You need to right a sequal, please? *Gives you the puppy dog look, with big browm eyes*

Loved. The story!

Awesome story. Disturbing idea, but... awesome story.

Well I thought you ended this the best way you could. Either this or you're right they could have killed themselves. There is no way their parents would have accepted them. I know for a fact I wouldn't have accepted it. I wouldn't care if my kid was gay, transgender, cross dresser, whatever, but incest is just too beyond for any family and society to take.

I know they loved each other, but now they're going to have to spend their lives lying about not being brother and sister and being scorned by society. It's a hard decision to make. It's either live without the one you love or lose everyone in your family and have society hate you. My mother had a high school friend that actually married and divorced her cousin. So I actually know this stuff happens. The woman had kids with the guy and everything. I don't think this was a good idea, because her kids are slow from the very close blood mixing. I haven't seen this lady in years, but I know many people in her family still hate her till this day.

I like interesting stories like this, but I definitely don't agree with this in real life. I think you're a good author to pull this off and actually make me sympathize with your characters.