only read a few chapters last night before i went to bed lol took me ages to find the story again a must add to the faveourites lisst :) this is great (so far) x

It stopped too abruptly...I was looking for the next page! It's caught my attention. I hope you write more.

wow.. i love the ending..
didnt expect that..
loved it..

ohmygod... wow. its kind of a weird subject, but its awesome. I cried. seriously, you should actually write, like, for more than just the internet, you have a great tyle to your work :)

Wow, this is a great story. You need to right a sequal, please? *Gives you the puppy dog look, with big browm eyes*

Loved. The story!

Awesome story. Disturbing idea, but... awesome story.

Well I thought you ended this the best way you could. Either this or you're right they could have killed themselves. There is no way their parents would have accepted them. I know for a fact I wouldn't have accepted it. I wouldn't care if my kid was gay, transgender, cross dresser, whatever, but incest is just too beyond for any family and society to take.

I know they loved each other, but now they're going to have to spend their lives lying about not being brother and sister and being scorned by society. It's a hard decision to make. It's either live without the one you love or lose everyone in your family and have society hate you. My mother had a high school friend that actually married and divorced her cousin. So I actually know this stuff happens. The woman had kids with the guy and everything. I don't think this was a good idea, because her kids are slow from the very close blood mixing. I haven't seen this lady in years, but I know many people in her family still hate her till this day.

I like interesting stories like this, but I definitely don't agree with this in real life. I think you're a good author to pull this off and actually make me sympathize with your characters.

i dunno whether or not i should feel really messed up for loving that story or just not care. like, sibling relationship aside, matt and jen were perfect for each other. matt is a very attractive character and who wouldn't want to ravage him? jen, seemingly, had the same effect on matt i guess. i can't say that it was wrong, but it wasn't right either. sinful or not though, i love them together. sick, maybe. god, i don't know. i'm just really freaking happy i don't have a brother after reading this. i don't mean that in a bad way, i just don't think i could look at him after reading this. but at the same time i guess i understand how that would and wouldn't work with matt and jen. i mean you could explain a lot just by those few years when their parents split and then got back together. those are prime sibling rivalry years those two missed out on :]

they didn't completely act like siblings, though. but i suppose after everything they really couldn't. looking back, they sort of acted like siblings butting heads at the very beginning. more so jen butting heads with matt. but how exactly did that change? i mean it seemed like matt was already in love with her kind of. one thing i would like to know, is when he fell in love with her. did he love her all along? maybe you could write the sequel from his point of view. it was left somewhat unsaid after you briefly gave his point of view. in my opinion, i would have provided his reasoning on the situation in that chapter. however, i wouldn't be surprised if he didn't know what on earth was going on either. but it sort of seemed like he knew more than jen at least about what to do. about how it started. i definately could be making stuff up in my head. ah, imagination. what a lovely thing. you definately have one. along with a very strong, refreshing voice and an interesting style. the plot was very well developed and it had substance. i've never really thought about that kind of incest, especially consenually in these times. i mean, sure egypt and stuff, but it's really mind-boggling thinking about if there are people out there with that kind of problem. well not mind-boggling, but i need another synonym for interesting. :p
out of curioustiy, you mentioned that incest was illegal in "some" states. i thought it was illegal in all of them. maybe im wrong? i don't really know.


i love matt and jen. ..more so matt. but i also liked your other characters. by the end, you really didn't hate andrea. she was an incredible friend, strangely.


my only criticism is that sometimes your apostrophe usage was off, but that's no big deal, i guess. i wasn't particularly bothered by it. you also had some grammar things like atleast- at least - being one word instead of two and the same thing with eachother- each other. the only reason why i say anything is because i noticed it several times. but again, it didn't bother me that much.


i really did love this story, strange as i feel saying it though. it was gutsy and creative. wonderful. :]

-ellie

you should publish this. it was that good. I would deffinatley buy this.

ah! that was so good! U NEED to write a sequal!

man they just need to do it again and dump Andrea and Adrian. LOL.

good job :)

who isn't nowdays. LOL.

finally! LOL.