I like this, well done it's really good.
Is the title a reference to the book 'Of Mice and Men'? If it is, I'm very proud of myself for realising, lol.
-Amy

Oh wow. That was absolutley beautiful! The writing and words were beautiful, and the rythming went very well. I love it

omg... that is amazing. Its like a song you'd hear on the radio. And it's poetic without using so many metaphors that ppl would have no clue wuts going on. its great. i love it.

if u had the time could you please review some of my songs? I'd really appreciate it. Thanks.

I enjoyed the whole entire thing! Start to finish! I really admire the rhythum/beat in this piece. Well done!

this is an absolutely beautiful poem! i was wondering, did you get the phrase "best-laid plans" from robert burns's "to a mouse"?

I love this so much! :) I have to keep coming back and reading it over and over again...the rhymes are so fluent and the whole piece fits together very nicely. I wish I knew what the tune was...

Wow, great song that flows nicely the whole way through, the use of imagery in the first verse is amazing as well, "I shot down a bird and stole wings to fly//I reached out my arms to embrace the sky" Beautiful!

I quite liked this - especially the tempo/beat, the rhythm to it? Forgotten the technical word for it. I know there's one, but nevermind.
But you lost that in the middle, then picked it up again. The middle was odd.
That's what struck me the most.

I'de say. You have quite a talent for writing.

As far as I can tell, you copied nothing directly. Wow, this just rolled from your mind? Nice. you have talent. Good job.