|Reviews for Hatsukoi|
| Karl Anthony 4/9/04 . chapter 1
It's like a novelized version of MayClub, with a few exceptions. Though not enough to be interesting, really. At least with how much I've read (Chapter five.)
| soulwings 4/6/04 . chapter 1
Hey I really like your work. *adds you to favourite authors list* Keep it coming. It's a rarety to find I like ALL of the stories/poems by one writer. _ Oh and thankyou for the lovely comments on my stories (and also about the whole coolyay thing)...
| justcallmesweetthang 4/6/04 . chapter 19
I liked ayame more thean Akiho not that I didn't like Akiho...but it seemed that we got to know ayame better than Akiho...and I didn't like how Ayame ended up single and living with Hajime and Akiho. It was good though and no one died like in San Nin Gumi, which is good because main characters dying is bad, sean.
| Cathefrine 3/26/04 . chapter 9
I really enjoyed this chapter, too. (which one haven't I enjoyed?) I do find that although Hajime was being polite, he was leading Ayame to believe he liked her. Oh well, that's my perspective. The situation does provide a nice conflict, so hopefully that will soon be resolved without anyone being hurt.
Ah, but enough of that. You updated while I was offline. yay! Now I'm bouncing over to chapter 10 and seeing what else you have in store.
| Cathefrine 3/25/04 . chapter 8
Aww. But oh. Doesn't Akiho love her boss MORE now? Is she just teasing Hajime?
As your story goes on, the characters become more complex and interesting. I love that about your style of writing. Ahh! I must go and read chapter 9 now!
| Cathefrine 3/25/04 . chapter 7
This chapter was short, so there's not much I can say (again). But despite it's length (or lack there of), I think it's one of my favorites so far. It lets the reader, in this case me, dive deeper into Hajime's thoughts. Although this might not have been your intention, you've made Hajime into an adorable character! _ He actually thinks and cares about the women he knows! *gasps* Where can I get one of those?
| Cathefrine 3/25/04 . chapter 6
Oh... *angst*angst* this is all turning out so differently from what I expected. Koji and Hajime are turning out to be quite the knights in shining armor, aren't they?
I don't have much more to say about this chapter, but how could I? I'm in too much of a state of shock. It was good, once again.
| Cathefrine 3/25/04 . chapter 5
Oh my goodness, you put your characters through so much drama... Sayomi's life is messed up.
And then there's Hajime. The way he's always talking about not being alone forever and "waiting for Mrs. Right"... I'm going to be forward and ask that if anyone reads between the lines, will they realize those are your own true feelings? (All stories come from some core of truth and experience, right?) Oh well, I'm probably wrong and the question was somewhat rhetorical. You can't exactly answer me. :-P
Ah, but that aside, I like Koji. Even though Sayomi embarrassed him with the whole Keiko thing, he swears to protect her and comforts her. How sweet _
| Cathefrine 3/25/04 . chapter 4
Poor Koji! Poor Sayomi! ... Poor Hajime!
:O I really really like Sayomi, but she seems to have troubles with her friends... a lot. She reminds me of Hajimi for some reason.
And Koji... That evil, evil Keiko. I don't understand how one person could crush someone with no second thought. It's sad that it happens often.
What was up with Ayame? Perhaps she has a secret crush on Hajime.. I'll just have to continue reading.
Akiho sure does have a lot of stress. o_o She nearly killed him! (okay, not really) But at least Hajime settled her down some.
Wonderful work once again! I love this story _
| Cathefrine 3/25/04 . chapter 3
This chapter was... how should I put it? Totally sweet. I really like Akiho and how she can be so dramatic.
The main reason I liked this chapter, though, was because of the virtual world. *begins sob story that nobody wants to hear* You see, I used to go to a chat room where there were the different private rooms. The Lobby, Help Desk, Stage, and Coffee House... (there were other rooms, I just can't remember them) Last September the chat was closed, and this brought back wonderfully memories of my three years in that chat room. *sigh* I'm done now.
Kudos to you! You've managed to create your own world and bring in another interesting character. Hopefully we hear a lot more from her. (like we're not going to.. hah)
| Cathefrine 3/25/04 . chapter 2
I really love the idea of our story, and you've developed your characters beautifully. There's only one thing I have to pick on: It would be nice if you didn't explain the time of day with one simple word, like "Morning". My own personal opinion is it would be better if it were described, but of course it isn't that big of a deal. _
Okay, enough of my boring suggestion, that's not why you wrote the story, is it? I'm really into the story, even though nothing much has happened. You've just made the characters so loveable! (Except for the womanizer... I'm not taking a liking to him so much :-P )
*frolics off to read chapter 3*
| Cathefrine 3/25/04 . chapter 1
Oh, I like the beginning. It was written wonderfully. I'm sure the pace will quicken with the whole other world and all... Why hasn't anyone reviewed? *shifty eyes* They're missing out.