Very good, pretty sounding. Although the rhythem was off a bit and again doesn't rhyme with vain and neither does regained. Other then that, it's pretty well written. Nice work.
Keep writing.
-Seras

The last two lines kick so much arse. I mean, it's all good, but that's such a strong ending..

I LOVE IT! you have managed to capture such a passion...you obviously write about wat ur feeling inside. I really, really liked it!