Wow, I didn't think it was dumb!! I like the single lines, they're quite powerful & I think that the opening was enough to get anybody hooked. ^^ - I'm definitely a HP fan and to me, it sounds like it could be a poem about Voldemort... (except the black shades, but who knows!) *sweat drop* - I think I've said enough, write on!!

Sweet poem! Perfect to read to little kids on Halloween. mawahahaha. Really, I think this is superb. Very nice.

very interesting ;)

=O That is SO descriptive! I could feel it strike down so deep... That's something to be very proud of! *applauds* =D

This is really good!:)You are a really good poet. Thx for reviewing my stuff.

cool! stuff that you don't know ehre it comes from is always good! its weird though when you look back and you just think "WHAT?!" yeah well, I have to go eat dinner or the parents will slaughter me, so im off! great though, i'll be back later! ^^
ps: of course i'm not annoyed! you and your stuff ROCKS!

This is far from being dumb. You want dumb you should read the lyrics to my song "oh scotty" lmao. I love this, it's so breathtaking, powerful, and deep. This is the part that really drew me in:
A sudden punch,
A quick twist,
A deep slash,
A fatal wound,
A wicked smile.
The draw of blood.
It's amazing! Great job. :)