I like the last two lines in the chorus... "I j/ wish I could make things better so I wouldn't hurt no more". A lot of the other songs would be like "so *you* wouldn't hurt no more", it's nice that it's different. original and refreshing to read!

I like this! YAY! Go you! Your a good song writer for someone who has recently started this!

"please shine for me once more."
that is an incredible line. i don't think it's the words used or anything it's just the whole desolate feeling that overwhelms you at the end of that verse and that line completely sums up the desperation of the song. so yeah, i liked this tons x 1,0,0,0,0,0,0,0,0,0 ^^ awesome!

Nice! You really put yourself into your songs, hold nothing back. It creates a very unique style. I love this.

*hugs again* if ur wondering bout the again, read the review before this, err or next in your inbox, lol!

Whoa I was actually singing this out loud! Aw the emotion in this one was really good... I like when people write from their experiences the most. I almost started crying! Ahh this is so well written!

excellent

first off, thanks for the review, i really appreciate it! (The guy wasn't real, he's completely made up but i appreciate your willingness to punch his lights out) Second off i really like this song it's good and i can understand in a roundabout way where you are coming from. really great job.
Luv always,
Debbie

I knew you would write more songs! This is really good, and I can relate. Write more! :)