i like this one the best this one is my favorite. hehe!

I LOVE the ending, the last few lines REALLY stand out, it's awesome. Really well-written, "this box someday, will turn inside out", good line. Keep writing!

I can relate to that completely and I love the way you wrote it. It flows nicely when read. The last line is oddly worded though...

Very good, but your rhyming seemed to start in the middle... I don't know if that was on purpose or what... But I can relate and that's one of the biggest things, I think. Thanks a lot for reviewing my stuf:)