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Mavin 2004-03-08 . chapter 1
Interesting poem, I particularly like the idea that the vampire can love to and that she calls to people. One line in particular I thought was great "she cares for many, she holds few". Excellent. That said, a few pointers? I thought this line - "Do not turn to her, there you'll find no grace" seemed a bit awkward, as though you were trying to force the rhyme (I've done that myself a lot) and I spotted one spelling mistake here "Always with you when your alone", it should be "you're". Just a couple of pointers but I liked it, overall! Well done!
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