the words are very powerful
i like your rhyming scheme
it flows very well, and it isnt at all forced

This is very good. The images I can see clearly w/in my mind.
In my English class in few weeks we're going to be doing something with poetry and we have to get a few pieces of our favorite authors together. Do you think I could use some of yours? If I can please E-mail me at InsaneSola@aol.com

I enjoyed this very much.
First off, you misuse some of your tenses; "The fragile notes of a piano crashes" may rhyme but is not grammarically correct, unless it was intentional due to inturpretation. Poetic licence allows us more freedom, so I do suppose that small indiscrepancies are acceptable.
I found the images that your words painted to be deliciously painful; you did an excellent job of putting the very abstractions that most fear to use.
I enjoyed your work very much!