wow this is really great so far update soon plz

You're very philosophical here. I'm still trying to figure out your statement, if there is one, about this world and the virtual world, or asking whether any world has the same absurdities/brutalities/ways of thinking... Well done!

First, I'll start with some constructive criticism, since that is what you want. But I will end in the honey of compliments, because I feel it is something you truly deserve.
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I do not know if this is the first chapter or a proem of sorts or even it is just the barest hint of what is to come when you actually write the story. Perhaps an author's note at the beginning to explain such would aid in this matter. Also, the "ending" to this short piece was rather bland and lacks any shimmer of suspense. I suppose if there were more to this, I wouldn't be so confused. Some people like waiting to find out later in the story what things mean, or some people like an up-front directory to what exactly is going on. For example, what in Zues' white skirts is ALEM? Is it an acronym? If so, what does it stand for?
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Absolutely stunning! Beautiful diction that just strengthens the elegant, liquid prose. Unusual and imaginative. Lovely and lyrical. Though a little reminiscent of The Matrix, it is enthrallingly original in its own right. I tip my hat to you, leader of language, whiz of words, dictator of diction, principal of prose, tyrant of text... need I go on?
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I would give constructive criticism, but I'm all constructive-criticism-ed out. (Just finished "critiqueing" a friend's story...) But yes. If constructive criticism shall make you continue writing, then constructive criticism you shall get! Just, not today.

great job keep writing

Oh interesting.
I like the choice of words you used. :D
Keep writing, I like it.