You need to slow down with your writing girl! It's too much to review but I'll try. I really like these types of poems; the kind that kinda questions the basis of 'right' and 'wrong'. Are we really making things better or even worse? Its our ability to ask these little questions that makes freedom of expression real. Loved the point and how it was made.
Bless.

An interesting idea!
I like the structure of your poem and the way it fits together.
Keep up the good work!

Thanks for the reviews :)
This poem is beautifully written... the questions asked here are honest but deep... I especially love "wondering what the hell is the sky"- the sky, something so many of us use metaphorically, something we all love, something that sort of symbollizes life in a way by the way it's in constant flux but is usually beautiful anyway... that sort of harsh way you ask, "Well what the heck is it anyway?" I can't describe it...
m* Sunflower, anyone?

Nicely executed.
...I would write more...but it's ten to two. am. Sorry dear.

What a unique idea...I am very impressed with by your creativity. Well done.

Beautiful, and so . . . true. ;; That's what I feel about life, defenately. My favorite parts were "here we cling like leeches" and "kingdom monera scattering and infesting our bodies." Very good work.

Funny, I was listening to Linkin Park's "Forgotten" when I started reading this... Which has a line "once the paper's crumpled up it can't be perfect again." So when I saw your line about crumpled paper, I was just like "Holy shit!"
I like the ideas you present in this poem... Very well expressed and very original. I really like the line "So here we cling like leeches."

Very thought-provoking. I am a blot...XD It made me laugh at the part of:
"So here we cling like leeches
and perplexity hanging over us
wondering what the hell is the sky..."
Great imagery and vocabulary as well..."...kingdom monera/scattering and infesting our bodies..." is very creative. Nice work.
-Arii

Nice...I like the whole theme of this.
Great imagery! _

i love it