FictionPress.com - let the words flow
| FictionPress.com - let the words flow |
|
| Home Just In Communities Forums Beta Readers Dictionary Search | Login Register Extras |
| Fantasy's-child 2004-03-10 ch 1,  | abuseHey, can't wait for you to carry on with this... Read and Review my story Unnerving Power... Thanx |
| zozsnash 2004-03-09 ch 1, | abuseVery gd start. But you might want to but more description in of the voice. Are they put out, bored, irrotated. You can tell alot about a person through their voice. also it then gives you more control over what the reader will imagine when reading. Keep writing :> |
| Nestalgica 2004-03-09 ch 1, | abuseXD! Very nice prologue; a hazy start, what with "...The Gods, Semi-gods, and all other immortal creatures, there is no heaven or hell, for there never was or ever will be an afterlife for them..." Change that sentence. It makes no sense. I LOVE THAT! CAUCASIONSON! XD! |