That was so good I think I'm gonna cry now.

wow i really loved this storyy..it was so heartfelt..and i actully almost started to cry at one point..good jobb keep up the good work :)

wow, the beginning was innocent, sweet, then romanitc and finally completely heartbreaking. :-( Please keep writing!

That was a lovely story, very powerful. I especially loved the excerpts of poetry in the middle, they really added something. One criticism: very abrupt ending. There was sex nd then there was death - there's a lot of room in between that. I think you have the potential (and the writing skills) to turn this into something much longer, and even more beautiful. I'll be checking back!
blue skies...

Oh my gosh, that was really good. I have a friend who is kinda like that. Werid. I'll probably wont get that far with him, but oh well.

Wow, that was intense.

The interspersed poetry added to the overall feel of the story. Again another absolutely beautiful story from you.

Oh My God, I think that about sums it up!

Whew....

very poignant. I've never had the knack of shrot stories, so I'm even more impressed. I like the ending...I've never liked 'happily every after'. I'd like to see more like this.

Alan, The Mad Dragon

well, it wqas good, but sad. maybe you could do somehting abothu a sequel??

Wow, that was really good. I always end up reading the tear-jerkers. lol. Keep writing!