You sound like your a LOT older than 16. You poems sound so mature and wise. I feel so young when i read them and i'm 17. (oh btw you wouldnt happen to goto carmel high school would you...? i was just wondering cause the whole El Bravo thing was just really creepy. you probably dont but oh well... LoL)

I believe that this truly describes the emptyness and pain death brings clinging to the only hope that one day you will meet again.

"It is in times of need that we have faith, the more dire the need the harder we hold on to our faith."
Unknown

i like the different lengths of pausing and it also make it look cool
*scrolls up and down and watches the "gone" move right to left*
very good.
pa-ja-mas

you know ..you really have a way with words and today im going to try to read and review all your poems..
P.s I wrote a new one if you want to read it

very sad, but hopeful too. I like it. I like the form of it too. Very original.

Nice poem. I thought the gones with all the lil dots was interesting. Good job, keep it up.
Luthien