:) This is a really good song. Though it seems more as a poem, to me? Either way I love it. You can rhyme!! -applauds- I cant, lmao. And the title is so..interesting :D

Wow, this is a really interesting piece. I like it a lot.But... there are some lines which are too long. I realise, being a song, when it's sung the length can be made more regular, but, for example, 'Predetermined things are written on paper' is the length of the next two lines put together which is confusing cause then theres another line afterwards.

But yeah, wonderful work.

I like this one, it's good.
You've got talent, I hope you keep on writing!

And your experiments seem to be your best work! ;-). The type of music you listen to?!... um- yeah- this describes what it definitely "feels and looks" like. Very sensual and dark. Keep writing!