"Are your playtimes troubled/haunted by the horrors below?" So Persephone can never really escape, can she? Interesting analysis of the myth.

Great poem! I really like the last stanza. I never considered how Persephone's experiences in the underworld would affect her childhood above ground. You did an excellent job of conveying the emotion of the myth in 3 stanzas. Very nice job!

The reflection at the end was my favorite part. An interesting take on the Persephone myth.

I like it. Shortbut very effective. Keep writing. You have lots of talent.
Trins x

Being Greek, I could not resist commenting on that.
I liked it. It gives a haunting description of the Underworld. It is only fitting that Persephone would take something of it to the world of the living, even if it were only dark dreams.
Good work. And thanks for the reviews.

Beautiful. Persephone is fun to play with. She is also a character in one of my poems, "Flood Me In Dressings of Thy Nile.," so this poem caught my attention right away. I love your last 4 lines...nice thought and wording...
PS: Like your choice on a pen name. Thanks for my reviews.

very depressing but i like the description in it.

Good insight ito the psychology of your character. The story of Persephone has always depressed me in a way, not only because of demeter's grief, but also because it isn't really so clear in the myths (apart from Ovid's version) that she loved Hades at all. Was more like an abduction ... You bring across the stark contrast between the light-filled world and the horrors of the Underworld quite well, especially in the way you work in the concept of different childhoods. Good job.

nice job. i took a mythology class last year, so i know what you're talking about...
p.s.
Thanks for the review! =)

shiver. I am going to be seeing haunted faces all day.

I like how the end of this poem seems to give the whole thing a sinister feel. It's as if Hades is mocking her, and the sentiment works quite well. Besides, good creepiness is hard to come by. :P

Short and pretty. I love that you based this off of Greek mythology, not that many people take the time to learn some of the stories which is really a shame. Again, great work!
~Faith, Hope and Love

Ooh, so terribly beautiful describing such place. I most enjoyed your comparisons and your rhetorical question, the main conclusion of the poem.

"the dull blue flames shudder" my favourite line. i really enjoy this poem! and i also adore your penname, unique, as is your poem! continue writting
sarah
(feel free to take a look at my writing!)

But Doesn't Pluto love Persephone? Poor Guy, doesn't know how to woo :P
nice.