hey this is nice. i like the second one better, but i am biased toward the vietnamese in this conflict. the first one was good, too. but i noticed some mistakes: Say you prayers? i think u mean, say YOUR prayers. and the last line of the vietnamese poem u spell vietnam: Vi?tnam.
i also see how me an u r different in our writing styles. i am not affraid to offend anyone, but mayb that is a good thing. u try to get people to like what u write, regardless of the subject.

Yep, I meant that thingy at the end too. Went to Vietnamese official tourism site, told it to speak to me it Vietnamese, and then copied and pasted the name of thier country as they themselves would write it. The funny characters unfortunately became a question mark.

^_^ *tee hee hee... YEs Pont dear, I know. It should sound familiar. It was supposed to be an allusion to that childhood mantra we sang to ourselves when we beleived (or still do) that if we wish on stars everything will be away. Harkening back to our childhood and bringing in the chil'd perspective/thoughts here. It was never intention to be a rip off: Hey, look at me! Look at this conveniant and nifty rhyme I just thought up!" ^_^ lol
And the rhythm should be very, incredibly, blatantly catchy. Dat da..dat da..dat da dah..dat dah..dat dah dat dah..dat dah..dat dah... I tried to make it like that, echoing the sound of a clock...
lol

Wow, very nice. Your expertise with poems amazes me. Great job spooni!
Did you mean to have that ? in the middle of 'viet' at the bottom? It makes sense, just I was wondering. If so, good touch.
keep up the good work!
~pont

Hm, very good! I'm sorry I haven't been around lately: Too many reviewers @_@
Hm, 'star light star bright first star i see tonight' sounds kinda familiar... :P might want to watch out for that, though the poem is great, and I'm not saying anything :x
Good sounds, I wish I could rhyme like you spooni *huggles* I love the ending. Maybe work a little on rhythm? It's great.
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pont

love this; brilliant work!

Hi, Spooni! Is it ok if I call you that? Pont does, and it's a lot easier than Spoonvonstup. Which reminds me, is there a story behind that name? I've always wondered.
Anyway, thanky thankies for the reviews! No, you hadn't already told me that my poem sounded like something from "A light in the attic", you told ancamna. (wow. try and write a more awkward sentence than that.) Are people mixing us up? We *are* best friends. By the way, do you know pont personally?(if you don't mind me asking.)It seems like you guys talk to each other away form fictionpress.
Alright, i don't really have anything else to say. I'm bored so I'm just reviewing everyone I can. I assume you don't mind. ^_^ Do I have to actually say something about the poems? I really like them. They made me think. yay!! write more! bye bye! ^_^

This poem made me think. I always wondered how people fighting in a war would feel. I don't know if I could ever do that...really, really good job.

Wow, this is really good. I like how it almost rhymes. It lends to the sense of time rolling and things the same, but not.