The third line sounds a little ordinary, and it seemed like you needed a little more imagery here.

~~Franken~~

k8 i2, ianthe05 name k e.
ewan ko, di naman yata talaga nagtatago si orion. pero astig kasi totoo nga namang sobrang dali siyang hanapin. :-)

Great idea! Are you planning to write poems on other constellations too?