Aw, that was so sad!! I liked this chapter overall, however. You kept up the girl's personality and all of the humorous twists in it. Keep up the good job, and please post again soon; it has been so long!

This is good and has potential. I thought it was a little confusing when she was writing in her journal, it was hard to tell when she was thinking and writing, maybe use italics to make that more clear. Also work on your paragraph breaks...but it's looking good. R&R my Silver Linings piece if you could!!

You had me cracking up!! All the parts where she was getting paranoid about the hobo looking at her with his crazy eye were hilarious. This was a great first chapter, and I'll be back for the rest!