lol, i like that last line:*not if i kill it first* to tell you the truth i prefer your third person narrative, i think that the first person is just *lacking* a bit, not as good as the third person.

i like your writing style, its tres clear, very vivid. But *woah* when i thought crime ,i didn't think...either way, i'm interested in finding out how sebs copes with the emotional turmoil, okay...so i'm a fan of angst, theres nothing better than confronting your ownself. way to go, keep it upxx Fuzz

I read all of it in one sitting ^.^I loved it and you must write more.One point of advice is that you spent a lot of time on the characters and not as must on the secnery descriptions.

*hugs*

It was Great!

Oh man! I am afraid of deep water too! Now this chapter is gonna make me freak even more whenever I go fishing. Ugh... Oh well, its good. Now to continue the march...

Gosh!! I didn't know this was finished. -_- I loved it. I especially loved the bloopers. :D I thought they were hilarious. I can't wait until the second story. ^_^

OMG
WHY DO YOU WRITE ANGST WHEN YOU CAN BE WRITING THIS?
I'M SO ** GIGGLY (I COULDN'T SAY LAUGHY, THAT'S JUST WRONG) THAT MY CHEEKS ARE HURTING AND I'M PRETTY SURE MY FACE IS BLUE.
THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR MENTIONING ME AND I LOVE THE LAST TWO CHAPTERS
I ESPECIALLY LOVE WHEN SEBASTIAN KNEW THAT GILLY WAS THERE BEFORE GILLY PRESENTED HIMSELF AND WHEN SEB WAS HOLDING THAT KNIFE AND DAMON WAS JUST SAYING, 'OH, YOU KNOW WHAT? I'M IN LOVE WITH YOU SO YOU CAN'T STICK ME'
I LOVE SEB
SEB IS A GOD
I ALSO LOVE JERAL
(YOUR ** ARE SO MUCH FUN)
LOVE THE ENDING

Ah. Happy ending. It was a good ending for a good story. Really well-written, humorous, dramatic and suspenseful. Your character development was excellent, and the dialogue was really very natural. Very well done^_^!

this is good. it has a good plot and suspense. whose side is sebastian on?

Aw, of course, blame the dog, ehehehe. Of course, now he's suddenly 'poor Tommick' instead of a filthy rat~_^. I'm glad Damon came to the rescue, though I think Sebastian was in control all along. Nicely done!

um, i have absolutely no idea what to say. um, since when does Damon have an apprentice.
where you implying something by talking about Ganymedes?
what was Sebastian's last line
and...
WHY THE ** WHERE THEY DISTRACTED?
THIS WOULD HAVE BEEN GOOD GOOD GOOD B & D SEX!
DAMN DAMN DAMN DAMN DAMN

Hm...complicated. Well done though. I'm just waiting to find out what Gilbert does next--and what Sebastian does with Damon, or vice versa.

WHAT?
HOW COULD YOU?
YOU MADE GILLY EVIL
AND THEN YOU DIDN'T POST THE NEXT CHAPTER THAT TELLS JUST HOW EVIL HE IS!
HOW COULD YOU MAKE HIM EVIL?
*sobs*
Gilly's to be good!
Gilly's to be a good good good fella!
What the hell was that with Sebastian?
Why is he constantly getting drunk/drugged when **?
*glares*
Why is Gilly evil?
How could Gilly be evil?
Why would you make Gilly evil?
*several minutes of more moaning and groaning at the unfairness of it all*
*shudder*
Sebastian was 'happy' in the last chapter. Freaked me out. *glare* update soon

This is an interesting turn of events. I hope all goes well. Update soon, please. Thanks.

Ah! So Damon was right, eh? Good for him. Gilbert is a wicked fellow indeed--I'm sure Sebastian agrees with me. Update soon^_^!

Jesus, I'm totally baffled. If you asked me right now who the kidnapper was, I'd think I'd as soon say Sebastian as anyone else...or...no, I have no idea. I like it though, even though Damon has, er...issues. Well done, I eagerly await the next chapter.