i don't do capitals. i only do minimal punctuation to make it readable. i also don't do titles :P i find these things irrelevent and detracting from what's important, which is the imagery. and i'm not saying that because i'm an arrogant bastard either.

Very good and very, very Lovecraftian. Good job with the archaic descriptions and the overall suspenseful horror feel. I'd suggest working on separating this into paragraphs which aren't so lengthy and easy to get lost in and work with the capitalization a bit. Other than that, a very good piece of work. The ending makes your gut clench in anticipation. Good job!