wow.
i loved that ultimately more than anything else you've ever written...not that they aren't excellent but this is even BETTER.
only suggestion: the end seems a bit abrupt, but maybe it was supposed to be that way. but i really loved it anyway..so sad and so GOOD.

Hey, pretty good. A little confusing, but pretty good. Will you continue? Or is this one of those one-try things? Anyways, it was good.

Awesome! That was REALLY REALLY good...

That's so depressing, but excellent writing. Good plot. Are you going to continue?