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Ramdar 2007-09-20 ch 48,	applaudes That was a great ending to a great story. I enjoyed it in the few hours it took me to start it and finish it. It's been awhile since I've done that. I'm really glad you wrote this, it's been a great experience reading it as well.
Ramdar 2007-09-20 ch 27,	That last quote just took the breath away from me. This is such a great story. I'm really looking forward to finishing it. Sorry about leaving the multiple reviews, but I figured you would like to have some input every couple of chapters.
Ramdar 2007-09-20 ch 25,	OMG I KNEW IT! Trace, holy crap.
Ramdar 2007-09-20 ch 24,	HOLY FREAKING CRAP! I love this. I've read a crap load in such a short time, but this is so good. I can't wait to find out about Trace...
Ramdar 2007-09-20 ch 18,	LOL. I just read 18 chapters so far and I really love this story. I was glad that Tru and Trace finally kissed, the buds of a good relationship. Okay...off to read more.
Ramdar 2007-09-20 ch 1,	Hellos, it's been forever since I've read anything that you've written, which is a shame because it is so good. I'm glad to hear that you are back and will be updating more now. Hope college is going well for you. I have about an hour of freetime, so I decided to go ahead and read one of your stories, so I decided to read the Souls Trilogy. I really like the prologue, there's not a whole lot to say about it. It's good though, keeps everyone guessing. I really can't wait to read the rest. (By the way, I've updated the Path to Arms, so if you would like to review that, or something else, that's fine with me)
R8R 2006-10-11 ch 1,	totally love it! KEEP Up the good work!
Adiwin 2006-09-24 ch 48,	I loved this story. I was a little confused at some points, but it explained itself in time. Dude, I'm back for sure now and I'm reposting the Four Children of the Elements. Please take a look at the new stuff. The first couple of chapters are pretty much the same, but I swear it changes as I go along. Great read!
Peaches 2006-07-04 ch 1,	Sam, I loved this story. You used gret details. I think the next chapter will be great. Good luck with collage!
Anjuali 2006-05-18 ch 2,	I really like your story! GOOD JOB! And thanks for the reviews!
Lady Sakaki 2006-05-08 ch 48,	Hey, I've been reading your story during school and it was enjoyable. ^-^ I only have some advice...though your stories (and I mean all of the work I have read from you) are...soild, they lack...creativity. You have a great plot and belivable charcters and you have the "twists and turns" that all stories should have but...that's all you have. What I'm saying is spice up your story! Don't be afraid to use figurtive language and actually pick inside your character's head! Your stories all have..."she said...he said...she did...he did..." and it gets boring after awhile because it's all repetitive and that's all you see! You just have the "skeleton" of your story...you're missing the muscles, nerves, and heart of the story. Do you more or less understand? It's not that you have a problem coming up with a good plot, it's just how you present it that the problem. It lacks...color. I hope you understand what I'm trying to tell you because if you start adding that to your stories, they will pretty much blow everyone away. Good luck! ^-^
ca2longoria 2006-05-05 ch 13,	Hm, this is very interesting. I'm wondering how this all pieces together. What's going on between all these people that relates somehow to the burning incident in the prologue. Malone, perhaps he was involved, perhaps somebody he knew. Perhaps somebody dear to him kept him from the school that one day because they either knew what was to occur or because they were responsible for it. And the social ladder, hehe, I am humored by that, as my school's supposed social ladder is very vague, very little of any ladder at all, so it's not too difficult to understand the fundamental human-nature follies in the side characters. Keeps it all human I suppose, nice stuff. Her refusal to accept her ability thus far, 'tis been frustrating for the mediator buddies no doubt, though how they know the specifics of their abilities remains a question. What sources did they use to discover the roots and likelihoods of their gifts in the first place? And this Anne, doesn't seem like she was trapped inside the cafeteria with everyone else, so the barricading of the doors could not have been an obvious thing, and the spread of the fire must have been very quick, otherwise she would likely have escaped. Mysteries upon mysteries, eh? I am enjoying your story, thanks much. Adios! :-)
ca2longoria 2006-05-03 ch 4,	Ah, Malone eh, now doesn't that sound familiar? Hehe, heylo again S.S. Dailey, it's been a while, hasn't it? But hey, I'm back, at least for now, and so are my reviews. So here we go then. The story starts off fascinating enough. A scary image that is, the burning of a school and its students, an uncomfortable thought not to mention. Nobody really wants to think what could happen in a school, too many youth could be harmed, too much innocence and potential put to indefinite rest. Scary thought. For this reason, opening up with the burning of a school building was perfect. The thought is disturbing, and the circumstances create a mystery. Why were the doors closed and unmoving as they were? Where was there absolutely no way out? Many questions arise from the prologue alone. and then fifty years later, fiftly long history-filled years follow that, the building repaired, school reopened, the mystery likely never really solved, and in comes the new girl. Dialogue a plenty, dialogue banquette more accurately, a significant amount, places most interest in the personalities and perspectives of the characters early on. Makes the atmosphere that of the characters' emotions, individualizing the storyline, and when the story focuses on one character in particular, that's the coolness. I would've hoped to have heard a little more about what happened between Tru and Mr. Williams, but that was about it for downsides. Good stuff thus far, and I've only reached the third chapter, hehe, can't wait to get to the rest. Keep on writing, eh? Adios! :-)
Vivian J. Edwards 2006-04-24 ch 48,	EXCELLENT!! I could not have asked for a better ending to this story- it was awesome! Can't wait for the sequel!! ((And you thought I was bugging you BEFORE...))
Adakua 2006-04-17 ch 2,	This is good so far, I like it. Anyway, I wish you good luck on making this a great story--to late for that. ^^ lol (You know what I mean) Well till next time ~waterhealer

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