|Reviews for Age|
| Story-Teller's Aide 3/18/04 . chapter 1
that was beautiful. i think the sentence 'and of sinful things' needs an extra word, or syllable or something. other than that it was lovely, really well written
| Hangman 3/15/04 . chapter 1
I dont know about this poem. For starters the rhythm isnt quite right, it needs a few more words in each verse to even it out. Other than that its all quite good except for a subject that seems a little too departed from you, the writer. Its well written, very simple, etc, but there seems to be no interest in the topic. Its not conjuring any images or inciting any thoughts, its just an old guy dying. I dont mean to be overly critical or rude, this work is good, it just seems to lack passion. Keep at it.
| ebonyheart 3/15/04 . chapter 1
the repetition in the middle verses is very good, makes it flow quite well. the memories of the old man are descriptive and well worded... keep it up